Do
We Still Need Zoos?
A large majority of animal activists have argued
that having animals in zoos is completely unethical. However, many others
believe it is necessary for zoos, due to the fact animals are safe and well
away from their predators.
Foremost scientists argue that zoos provide
food, water, shelter and especially medical treatment for the animals; therefore
they are able to keep healthy. Furthermore, due to the number of extinctions zoos
have successfully breaded many animals adding to the world’s population. In
addition to this, young pupils have a fantastic opportunity to see the animals,
which encourages them to learn more about them.
On the other hand, most animal activists believe
that animals slowly lose their natural instincts, also that the unfortunate
animals are incapable of roaming free, whereas in the wild they can accomplish
absolutely anything. Following on, many others believe that animals are in this
world for a reason not just for mankind’s entertainment.
Overall, statistics show that zoos are a healthy environment for animals,
although they have been captured from their natural habitat. Have these
vulnerable animals been treated fairly or have they been taken advantage of?
Miserable Monkey Trapped in Zoo
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