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Sunday 29 April 2012

Descriptive Writing

Descriptive Writing
Can you write a description of this chocolate treat?

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  1. Have you ever experienced lucious chocolate mousse dancing gracefully on your tingling tastebuds? Well, that's the exact feeling you will get if you try the most devine treat; Mississippi Mud Pie, which is protected by a creamy mousse shell. While you slice a peice of the well-deserved dessert, your eyes are glued onto the sight of the melted chocolate that gushes out of the core, like a fountain. Eat it now! The crumbling brownie awaits you...

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  2. Slowly, the divine chocolate topping tricklees down the mouth-watering triffle. Just after yyou take one bite, you feel like you are in heaven. After you devour the luxurious custard, it feels like stars are dancing gracefully on your tongue. Suddenly, the smooth cake bursts into moments of goodness in your mouth, as you stomach growls impatiently for another bite! Can you resist this heavenly chocolate dessert?

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    1. You deserved to be awarded in the 'Well Done' assembly, for this outstanding description!

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    2. well done neha u deserve to be awarded in the well done assembly Great Work

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    3. Nice work Neha! Keep it up girl. LOL :d

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  3. Slowly, the luxurious truffle breaks into half, letting out a mouth watering river of chocolate. Oozing around the cake, the lucious melted chocolate swims like an army of soilders. Everyone agrees that this divine dessert is a precious gift from heaven. As soon as you take one bite, you will feel like you are in a magnificent dream. It is mesmoring! Can you feel your stomach growling?

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    1. Spectacular writing ! :D Sounds as if its level 5.

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    2. You deserved to be awarded in the 'Well Done' assembly, for this outstanding description!

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    3. Thank you so much Miss Farmah, from now on I promise I will produce work like this. Thanks aswell Neha. :d Your work is fantastic.

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  4. AAn oozing, irresistible filling trickles down the mountain of chocolate, like a waterfall forming a river. It's endulged in smoothness and smothered in luciousness. It mesmories its helpless victims. It's like a lavish dream, which sends your taste buds crazy and explodes in your mouth like fireworks! Your mouth waters endlessly. The chocolate mousse is a divine, elegant treat, which is ready to take on anyones taste buds!

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    1. Great vocabulary ! :D

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    2. WOW ! :O That is spectacular writing Yusra.

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    3. Thank you Neha x
      I love yours too !

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  5. Gracefully, the moist chocolate cake melts in my mouth, sticky with fudge frosting on my tongue. The bitter and simultaneously sweet smell of it puts me in a serene mind state. I smack my full red lips together. With the rich deep shades of brown on every delicious layer this cake acts as a slice of happiness on a white styrofoam plate. Can you feel your taste buds tingeling in your mouth?

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  6. i love yusra and inderpreet's vcop
    great work,i will try to be as descriptive as you

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    1. Nissaa !
      Rememeber Miss told you to use capital letters and fullstops !
      You never used a capital letter for I !
      LOL

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    2. Sorry i am a forgetful person

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  7. You could hear the rusten ricketing of the pan as it was carefully taken out of the old wooden stove.
    Instantly the sensation of rich, flowing and full scents filled the air. The kitchen itself was damp, and the chefs stood around the cake, slowly easing it out of its pan and on to a round, shiny glass plate.

    With stupefying expertise and adroitness one of them grabbed a whisk, and started to beat and cudgel a large portion of golden, luscious and rich caramel fudge. The velvety frosting was folded over and over, leaving small traces of where it before had been folded, and ever so slowly - going paler. Every now and then he lifted the whisk and the flowing, silky contents of the bowl slowly let go of the whisk and formed white, sharp tops, like a chain of snowy mountains.This Is My Best Ever Writing I Guess

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  8. i love this cake 'yum yum'

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  9. Can you fell the spectacular taste of this succulent cake make your mouth water like a water fall can you resist the
    smell of the cake adventurer thro the monumental rooms and control you and drags you closer and close wiliest saying eat me eat me i am succulent and a well earned desert for you to enjoy but here is the summery will you eat it or not.

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  10. RuTina PiffPiff3 May 2012 at 07:08

    A volcano of pudding, Like lava the chocolate gushes down the chocolate chunk mountains. As soon as it enters your mouth, its luscious walls of mousse melt creamily in your mouth.

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  11. As the tantalizing chocolate cake melts in your impatient mouth, your yearning taste buds would be imploring your mouth for another luscious nibble from the appetizing, mouth-watering chocolate treat!

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  12. You are all making my mouth water! I think you all need to buy me some chocolate :)

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    1. The other way round Miss Farmah!!!

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    2. At the end of the year Miss Farmah!

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  13. Why can't I write like this at school ?
    I hope we all do way better than this at SATS !
    GOOD LUCK EVERYONE !

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