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Wednesday 13 March 2013

Arozo's Work


DANGOUROUS FIRE!

 
 
IN the event of fire, should people make a safe room and wait to be rescued?

 

Many people believe that they should escape from a burning building however strong the fire is statistics show that a high percentage of deaths in fire are caused by people trying to leave the building. Therefore, making a safe room and waiting to be recused is the only option if a exits are blocked and the building if full of smoke.

 

Most importantly, smoke is lethal.  Over the past year 20,000 deaths have occurred due to smoke inhalation. Scientists have stated that humans can only breathe in four to six breaths of smoke before they collapse. As a result it can cause serous breathing problems and injuries.

 

Furthermore, escaping out of a house can be really difficult and can cause much danger. 99% people around the world have died by not staying in a safe room and going downstairs to see what’s happening inside the building. AS a consequence, Mr Smith who once tried to jump out of a window from a burning building has broken his back and is paralyzed forever for this you should not try to do this.

 

In conclusion, it is clear that people should stay in a safe room rather than going outside to escape form a burning building. Furthermore, if they are only young they would live for short time more than a long life. Most humans argue that you should stay in a safe room for some help instead of going downstairs and risking your peruse lives.

 

 

Surely you must agree that staying in a safe room will help you to stay alive more than risking your lives going downstairs or jumping out of a high window?

 

By Arozo

 

 
                                                                                 

5 comments:

  1. Extraordinary work!
    *Great vocabulary.
    *Fantastic connectives

    W-Forgot to use commas in some places.

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  2. Excellent piece of writing! The formal language was great and I liked the question at the end.

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  3. This is Phenomenal Arozo!
    Great sentence openers!

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  4. Excellent!
    *Good use of puncuation
    *Good use of openers
    W-You can use more commers

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  5. You produced an amazing piece of writing. You used a lot of technical vocabulary and had many openers but you need to make sure that you put your punctuation in the right places

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