The
Violent Volcano
As
peaquil as a dove, the mighty mountain stares at the views ahead,
Slowly
drifting off into its deep sleep,
It is a
blanket of snow covering the hole which would unleash hell.
Slowly,
the mountain begins to awake from its slumber,
Trembling
ferociously, the vile volcano begins to rumble,
Like an
earthquake, it begins to make a light vibration,
It is a
bomb waiting to explode.
Rapidly,
the volcano erupts, unleashing devastation unto the village below,
The
demented beast will destroy anything in its path, vexed volcano unleashes
poison toxic into the air,
By Raeis
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