LOST!
Ben and William, who were peacefully observing for insects, had
not realized that there class mates had left them behind boarding the coach
back to school. However, they now abandoned in the epic forest like wild caged
animals.
Suddenly, the two abandoned boys heard a coach moving down the
road rushing in the distance. William was pouncing up and down in mad temper!
Like a wild cat, he began worser, even though he should becoming calm. Oh no!
Oh no! Oh no! How are we going to get out of this terrifying forest? Where
going to die I want my mummy!” William commanded, while kicking leaves out of
his way.
Brave Ben, who was much calmer than William, was sitting contently
in thought. “It’s ok William. We just need to find the grounds keepers for the
forest. We’ll be fine, just stay calm. Don’t panic.” Commanded Ben, while
trying to put his arms around William’s shoulders, to calm him down. Wait. Ding
dong. “That’s the emergency bell. We got to hurry,” while complexing William.
When he opened the door it won’t open. Ahh! The door’s locked what shall we do?
We’re going to get burnt!”
From
Samiha
Fuji
Class
I raelly liked your title (LOST) it does not give to much away and i also like your punctuation.
ReplyDelete* You used great vocabulary
ReplyDelete* You used a variety of sentence openers
W- You need to use your said word without a capital letter (Commanded Ben)
You used great Vocabulary
ReplyDeleteYou need to use more vocabulary