Total Pageviews

Wednesday, 13 March 2013

Samiha's Work


LOST!

 

Ben and William, who were peacefully observing for insects, had not realized that there class mates had left them behind boarding the coach back to school. However, they now abandoned in the epic forest like wild caged animals.

 
Suddenly, the two abandoned boys heard a coach moving down the road rushing in the distance. William was pouncing up and down in mad temper! Like a wild cat, he began worser, even though he should becoming calm. Oh no! Oh no! Oh no! How are we going to get out of this terrifying forest? Where going to die I want my mummy!” William commanded, while kicking leaves out of his way.

 
Brave Ben, who was much calmer than William, was sitting contently in thought. “It’s ok William. We just need to find the grounds keepers for the forest. We’ll be fine, just stay calm. Don’t panic.” Commanded Ben, while trying to put his arms around William’s shoulders, to calm him down. Wait. Ding dong. “That’s the emergency bell. We got to hurry,” while complexing William. When he opened the door it won’t open. Ahh! The door’s locked what shall we do? We’re going to get burnt!”

 

 

From Samiha

Fuji Class

3 comments:

  1. I raelly liked your title (LOST) it does not give to much away and i also like your punctuation.

    ReplyDelete
  2. * You used great vocabulary
    * You used a variety of sentence openers

    W- You need to use your said word without a capital letter (Commanded Ben)

    ReplyDelete
  3. You used great Vocabulary
    You need to use more vocabulary

    ReplyDelete