AN AMAZING RECORD HAS BEEN
BROKEN!
Faaris Moreland (aged 10). Broke an amazing
world record, for eating the most packet of crisps in one day. This astonishing
record was broken at the home of Walkers cri3sps the Walkers factory, Faaris
Moreland wanted to raise money for CANCER REASEARCH.
The extraordinary record breaker had this to
say, “I am astonished that I have broken a world record I never knew I could do
such thing”Altough Faaris knew that crisps wasn’t good for him he was
determined to break a record. Doctors have stated that they are extremely
concerned at this child’s health, consuming 499 packets of crisps is hazardous
for his health.
For his achievement Faaris has been rewarded a
gold medal from the Queen of London. Faaris Moreland has raised £ 496,564,646.
The impossible has been proved possible by a ten year old boy! Will anyone neat
his?
Good vocab.
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*Better puntuation
You have very good ocabulary in this piece. Also i liked you amazing openers
ReplyDeleteGreat work, your vocabulary is amazing, your punctuation is all correct
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