Dear
Diary
I can’t
believe what I have done! I have just
killed our great king because my wife just
toll me to kill him just to gate that lovely crowned.have
killed my best friend wane l killed my friend.wanted to
be the king of Scotland.he witches
toll me that they are not lien that they are tolled truth. Saddley I
want again to the witches and there was little baby then I have To run as
fast I can. He well fell
vary up sate because his wife well died.
*Great Vocabulary an great choice of words.
ReplyDelete*Great openers they are great.
*Punucashion chould be better.
Fantastic peaice of work and good set of operners.
ReplyDeleteYour work needs to be improved by adding similies and suspence to make the reader want to read more.You have structured your writing and you have used the correct punctuation.Try making your writing longer too.
ReplyDelete*great strutured