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Wednesday, 6 March 2013

Bilals work

                                                            Diary Entry 
 
Dear diary,

              I can’t believe what I have done! Over came with guilt, I have slathered my dear cousin King Dunkan. How stupid was I to think I would get away with murder? Why did I commit this vile attack? Continually, I entered the massive bed chamber where King Dunkan’s dead body lay. While I was gambling with my life I didn’t all this depression was all for my selfish needs. I was feeling melancholy.

 

As I was playing with danger, I had an emotional break down and started to regret my actions. But a seed of ambition was planted in me by the wicked witches, all I wanted was to keep the witches prophecy and run a happy city.

 

On the other hand, I am over joyed as I am a step closer to becoming a king. 
 
By Bilal   

5 comments:

  1. What a incredible piece of work. I wish I could write like that.

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  2. what a great piece but next time use more adjectives

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  3. A wonderful piece of work and the great feelings and thoughts are great. Also, you used lots of adjectives.
    You only need to work on your complex sentences.

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  4. Good vocab.
    Good connectives.
    *Better puntuation

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  5. Amazing vocablary and operners but try not to use i alot but a amazing piace of work keep it up

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